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In my opinion, from the perspectives relaxed lifestyle and cost, I agree that more Japanese people will move to the countryside after they retire in the future

Firstly, there are too many buildings and people in cities. Elderly people are very tired when they go to such places. On the other hand almost countryside are blessed with nature. If they move the rural areas, they will come into contact with plant and living things. They may feel better than living in cities

Additionally, when they live in town, they need much money, because if they enjoy spendig time in cities, they will pay much money without their nothing. Though they don't have job, they will have trouble getting by when they live in cities, they can do recreation with neighborhood without money,

In conclusion, I agree that more Japanese people will move to the countryside after they retire in the future

提出した英作文の論構造

文章全体での論旨: 将来的に、より多くの日本人が退職後に田舎へ移住するだろうという意見に賛成。

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3パラグラフ: 結論 - 上記2つの理由から、退職後に田舎へ移住する日本人が増えるだろう。

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